"Show, don't tell."
1. Did you read your story out loud?
2. Did you double check your spelling?
3. Did you capitalize and punctuate correctly?
4. Did you use interesting vocabulary?
5. Did you write a good beginning and ending?
As you learn to write, you will hear teachers and editors say,
We can understand how a person feels by his actions and facial expressions.
We talk without words all the time.
Observe how people communicate with their posture and movements.
Instead of telling us that the child is angry, you could write -
Mickey screamed and stomped his feet.
Instead of telling us that someone is sleepy, you could write -
Grandpa plopped in his chair and closed his eyes.
Tell me what emotion is shown by these sentences.
1. Robert burst through the classroom door and slid into his chair just as the bell rang.
2. Curled into a ball, Tammy lay her cheek on her knees and let the tears soak her jeans.
3. Sam's feet felt as heavy as bricks as he walked toward the policeman's car.
4. Beth leaned on the windowsill and traced the raindrop down the pane.
5. Jumping up from the dust at home plate, Mike raised his fists in the air as his team surrounded him.
Write a story about someone eating something new.
Don't use any dialogue or tell how they feel. Show it through description and actions.
Email it to me.
Don't tell me how you feel; show me.
Make a Face.
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